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Hashem ElAssad June 04, 2023 at 01:02 PM

Hi, looking for feedback on my LinkedIn newsletter edition before I publish it. It's called "Neurofeedback: A solution for stopping me from involuntarily shouting gibberish (tics)" where I tackle
1-what is neurofeedback
2- how it helped me get rid of tics and improved my sleep
3- How I cam across it?
4- Why is it a hidden gem?
You can directly comment or edit. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1jaawkOjxQBDve2dqe_BigKHsObKfwSFstf3rdFneX5Y/edit#

Koa Elder June 06, 2023 at 08:58 PM

Isn’t this a request for collaboration for the #content-collab channel?

Jekoniah June 07, 2023 at 04:56 AM

I would suggest you make the paragraphs shorter...1-3 lines per paragraph.

Hashem ElAssad June 07, 2023 at 11:52 AM

@Koa Elder I thought about that but since the person who offers the feedback won't be mentioned in the piece, I reckoned it's not really a content collab item

Hashem ElAssad June 07, 2023 at 11:53 AM

@Jekoniah Thank you!