#writing-feedback
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We've released a reality TV series inspired by @Joei Chan but someone starting his ecommerce journey. Looking for some feedback. Is someone happy to look at? It's 3-5mins long max
I’m game to help.
@Ronnie Higgins in general, I just wanted to know if it's a show that has this attention grabbing and if it's interesting for you to follow.
Although, you're not in ecommerce market.
I'm not in the market. But the idea that someone would be willing to document and share their journey is interesting enough to follow. Add in the quality of footage and Nelio being charismatic, and you're on the right track.
just saw this @Aazar! Great job for starting this series. Indeed you have a charismatic host so that’s great. I think right now the format feels a little more like a how-to/explainer video than a reality show with a storyline, obstacles and desires, like a series. Missing a bit of emotional stakes. That’s totally fine as a format, but just making this comment because you mentioned being inspired by our Onboarding series 🙂
@Joei Chan great feedback! I'll include that next time.
Ours is a bit content heavy but I think we can include drama in the beginning and the end 🙂